Single Syllable Exercise

[gothick]

She wore a red dress. The hem fell just to the knee, with a fine pair of calves to the floor. Two red shoes held her feet high on the tips of her toes. Her lips, like the shoes, were gloss red, and blonde hair framed a sharp face, sharp and clear and calm.
Her eyes were blue. She stood tall, six feet I'd say, with her heels and her poise. Her hand lay light on the rail as she looked out on the town. I felt the need to join her, to touch her far-flung mind, to be with her. But I was too scared.
I left her there, dress blown in the wind at the edge of the flat roof.
It was the last time I saw her.
It was the last time she was seen.

Comments

[kaveypie.livejournal.com]

Wow.

[gothick-matt.livejournal.com]

Yeah. I liked it. We were given "She wore a red dress", the one-syllable-only rule, and about five minutes. I finished early, because it just came to a natural stop. The one-syllable rule really helps you write just that little bit differently, and it helps with avoiding clichés, too.

[ruthj.livejournal.com]

It is amazing how rich a single syllable word can be

Reminds me of 'Those Whole Girls' by Suzanne Vega (http://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/suzannevega/thosewholegirlsruningrace.html )

[ngma.livejournal.com]

I like:-)